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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph illustrates, the
stolen
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number of stolen
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vehicles
 per thousand in four countries(Great Britain, Sweden, France, and Canada), during the period from 1990 to 1999.
Overall
, Compare to the other three countries, great britain shows a high number throughout the Years. France and Canada
has
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have
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 almost equal in numbers.
To begin
 with,Near to 8
car
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cars
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stolen
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were stolen
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 in the
year
 1990 and continues the next
year
 and it dramatically decreased and reach 5 in 1993 and remains
steadily
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steady
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 till 1999. Compare to other nations, Canada is in the
last
 position of car stolen among others.
Furthermore
, Sweden is in
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the second-lastlast
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second-lastlast
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second-last-last
 position. In the beginning years near to six car steal. Following years, it gradually increased and reach near to 15
among
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apply
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per thousand
vehicles
 in the
year
 1999.
Although
, France shows up and down in the graphical representation. In the starting
year
 near to 10
vehicles
 and it went down and reach near to seven in the
year
 1993. After ,that it went up in the
year
 1995. By the end of the
year
 again it decreased and reached six in number in the
year
 1999.
Last
 but not
the
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apply
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least,
Vehicles
 stolen from
great
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Great
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 Britain
is
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are
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 near
to
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apply
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20 and the graph shows a wave line and ends up
in
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with
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 the same number in 1999.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
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