The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.
The chart given shows information on
trips
made by students using different modes of transportation(
car
, walk, cycle, walk and
bus
, and
bus
only) to and from school in a country in the years 1990 and 2010. Children are aged between 5 and 12 and the units are measured
trips
per year(in millions).
Overall
, the most preferred commuting was walking in 1990
whereas
trips
using the
car
were the least.
Similarly
in the year
2010
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the highest
trips
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number of trips
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were made using the
car
while
the usage of cycles was the lowest.
Moreover
, we can see a significant drop in 4 modes of transportation(walking, cycling, walking and
bus
and
bus
only) and a huge rise in the utilization of cars from 1990 to 2010 respectively.
Furthermore
, in 1990 the number of
trips
by walking revealed data slightly above 12
million
and by
car
reported around 4
million
. In terms of 2010 use of cars was valued at around 10.5
million
while
cycles gave the lowest value which is 2
million
.
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