The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.
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The chart given shows information on
trips
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made by students using different modes of transportation(
car
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, walk, cycle, walk and
bus
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, and
bus
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only) to and from school in a country in the years 1990 and 2010. Children are aged between 5 and 12 and the units are measured
trips
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per year(in millions).
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, the most preferred commuting was walking in 1990
whereas
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trips
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using the
car
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were the least.
Similarly
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in the year
2010
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the highest
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trips
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number of trips
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were made using the
car
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while
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the usage of cycles was the lowest.
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, we can see a significant drop in 4 modes of transportation(walking, cycling, walking and
bus
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and
bus
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only) and a huge rise in the utilization of cars from 1990 to 2010 respectively.
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, in 1990 the number of
trips
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by walking revealed data slightly above 12
million
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and by
car
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reported around 4
million
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. In terms of 2010 use of cars was valued at around 10.5
million
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while
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cycles gave the lowest value which is 2
million
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.
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