The proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998

The share of income allocated by
adults
and
children
in the UK towards four typical expenditures in 1998.
Overall
,
while
among Food the highest spent people were
Women
, among Electronic Equipment ,
children
spent
largest
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amount
of their budget.
In contrast
, when it comes to Music,
girls
preferred
this
category
mostly.
However
, videos were preferred mostly by
Boys
. As the table shows,the highest spent people were
Women
with 39% in the Food group.The second-largest indicator was
Adults
at 25 per
cent
,
while
the smallest
amount
was
Boys
and
Children
with 9% and 10%.
Whereas
, the middle categories were
Men
and
Girls
with 11 and 14 per
cent
. Regarding
to
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the Electronic equipment, the
children
spent the highest
amount
of their money at 23%.The second-largest
amount
was at 18 per
cent
and
spent
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mostly by
Boys
.
However
,
Women's
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figure was the smallest with 1%,
while
Girls
and
Adults
recorded the same figure of 5 per
cent
.
Then
, the middle
category
was
Men
at 10%. As for the Music,all categories were almost the same.
Whereas
, the spending by
Adults
,
Men
and
Women
were
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with
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5%,5% and 5 per
cent
, respectively.The remaining three other competitors
Children
,
Boys
and
Girls
recorded 39%, 38% and 40 per
cent
, respectively. They differed from each other by 1 per
cent
and the largest
amount
was spent by
Girls
for
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music in 1988. In
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videos
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video
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trend, the highest indicator was
Boys
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the Boys
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category
with 18 per
cent
.
Girl
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The girl
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category
was the second-largest figure at 17%.
Whereas
,
while
children
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the children
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index was the middle share at 12%,
Adults
,
Men
and
Women
were almost the same with 1%, 2% and 0,5 per
cent
in the UK in 1998.
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