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Children can learn effectively by watching television. Therefore they should be encouraged to watch television regularly at home and at school. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#children #television #home #school
Learning some things
while
 watching
TV
 for
children
 can be effective.
Hence
 they ought to be supported by their
parents
 to watch
TV
 daily at home and at school.
This
 essay completely agrees with that statement because it will help them to learn their lessons easier and
TV
 can teach them more efficiently. Nowadays, televisions have a lot of new functions when compared with the past. It can connect to the Internet. When
children
 need some help with their homework,
parents
 can open YouTube and help their
children
. Especially on YouTube there is have a lot of educational lecture videos which is suitable for pupils to learn what they have trouble with it.
For example
, nearly all
parents
 were hiring teachers to teach their
children
 that had issues with any subject in their school but now they can just connect to the internet on
TV
 and open video about it. Another benefit to use television as a teaching tool is being more effective than other methods. New generations like to learn something on technological devices. Almost all families have a
TV
 at their home and
children
 like to watch and try to imitate what they are seeing.
Parents
 can get help from
TV
 to integrate some ideas or skills into their offspring.
Furthermore
, people can affect their
children
 with animations and interesting videos.
For instance
, in Turkey,
parents
 are working and they have no time to teach them how they can be a good person. They are opening
TV
 programs which are teaching
children
. In conclusion, Technological tools are becoming more popular
amongst
Change preposition
among
show examples
parents
 to educate their offspring more effectively. I strongly agree with that statement because it is helping students to learn their school subjects with less effort and TVs are enjoyable and efficient to learn something on it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • passive
  • sedentary
  • limit
  • creativity
  • imagination
  • educational content
  • expose
  • different cultures
  • perspectives
  • negative effects
  • behavior
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