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In some countries, there is not enough recycling of waste materials (e.g. paper, glass, and cans). What are the reasons and what can be done to solve this problem?

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Considering the rapid increase in daily consumption of reusable materials, the
waste
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 recycling system plays a crucial role in the relationship between environment protection and society development now, but their behaviour is lower than expected. In
this
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 essay, the reasons behind the phenomenon,
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 some possible solutions, will be illustrated. Theoretically, it is a challenge to recycle all
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 materials from industry and community.
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 process mainly relies on the cooperation of the public and
government
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, so each citizen’s awareness of the importance of
waste
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 sorting will affect the quantity and quality of recycling
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, which means both of them should respond to the insufficient.
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, in some extremely disadvantaged areas, the
government
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 may not be able to afford rubbish recycling facilities and is weak in fundamental establishment for
waste
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 collection, contributing to the chaos of
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 management. In order to improve the situation, the
government
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 could cultivate and promote the spreading of ideas about rubbish classification among people, even aggressively
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 some punishment policies to motivate the acceptance of environment-related knowledge and information. Based on my experience in Australia, the expensive fines for hard
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 positively influence my habit of dealing with useless furniture.
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, most developing countries can widely set
waste
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 collection points or bins, and these arrangements accelerate the speed of sorting and effectively control the cost of the labour force for rubbish recycling, which benefits both the national economy and the living environment in communities.
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, the shortage of development and supervision from the
government
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 leads to some reusable materials losing their expected value, but the strength and advertising of environmental protection policy definitely have a valuable
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 on the public, fostering a spontaneous movement of recycling.
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