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People nowadays tend to have children at older ages. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent times, most families chose to attain eld before bearing offspring. I personally believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages as
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 can lead to some complications during labour. These points will be
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 explained in the subsequent paragraphs with appropriate examples.
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, women conceiving at later stages are associated with it's own merit which is attaining financial stability before becoming parents.
Marriage
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 is a union that results in the production of children at the desired time as agreed by the couples. Money is a standing factor that enhances growth in a relationship,
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 not giving birth immediately after
marriage
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, helps both man and woman to plan ahead for the future
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 creating sufficient time to build experiences and gather ideas.
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, late childbearing
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 has its own demerits which are complications during delivery. Experience, ideas and resources can be acquired longer in
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 but death
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 of health conditions developed by an old first-time mother can not be reversed.
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 research, male and female are most productive between years 25- 32.
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 pregnancy is viable outside those ages. Critical health cases could be diagnosed
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 as foetal or maternal death, fibroid, uterine rupture, cervical laceration, eclampsia and bleeding during and after delivery may occur. Early child production will help avoid
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 demerit.
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, I recently had an encounter with a woman who got wedded at 28 years but waited till age 33 before conceiving. Unfortunately, she lost her strength during labour which led to
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 section and post-partum bleeding. In conclusion, the accumulation of enough ideas about
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 finances is an excellent decision.
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, the terrible health complications caused by late childbearing can not be overlooked.
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