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People nowadays tend to have children at older ages. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent times, most families chose to attain eld before bearing offspring. I personally believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages as
this
 can lead to some complications during labour. These points will be
further
 explained in the subsequent paragraphs with appropriate examples.
To begin
, women conceiving at later stages are associated with it's own merit which is attaining financial stability before becoming parents.
Marriage
 is a union that results in the production of children at the desired time as agreed by the couples. Money is a standing factor that enhances growth in a relationship,
therefore
 not giving birth immediately after
marriage
, helps both man and woman to plan ahead for the future
as well as
 creating sufficient time to build experiences and gather ideas.
However
, late childbearing
also
 has its own demerits which are complications during delivery. Experience, ideas and resources can be acquired longer in
marriage
 but death
as a result
 of health conditions developed by an old first-time mother can not be reversed.
According to
 research, male and female are most productive between years 25- 32.
Although
 pregnancy is viable outside those ages. Critical health cases could be diagnosed
such
 as foetal or maternal death, fibroid, uterine rupture, cervical laceration, eclampsia and bleeding during and after delivery may occur. Early child production will help avoid
this
 demerit.
For example
, I recently had an encounter with a woman who got wedded at 28 years but waited till age 33 before conceiving. Unfortunately, she lost her strength during labour which led to
caesarian
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 section and post-partum bleeding. In conclusion, the accumulation of enough ideas about
marriage
as well as
 finances is an excellent decision.
However
, the terrible health complications caused by late childbearing can not be overlooked.
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