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Most people are now seen giving birth in the old age to what advantage or disadvantage is it to human.discuss

#people #birth #age #advantage
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 lots of challenges parents face in the upbringing of their children, it has made the majority take the decision on starting a family in old
age
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.
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 decision will make them to be financially capable for the children even before they were born.
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, waiting for so long can make the female parent attain
menopause
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 unknowingly.
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 will be expatriates in the essay. To start producing a family in old
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 is beneficial as it helps one to hustle during an early
age
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 in the achievement of one's goals
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 as wealth. For ,instance when you give birth at an early
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 without having sufficient financial backup , providing for the child will be difficult which will make you regret starting a family at a young
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. Lots of school dropouts are a result of financial incapability.
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this
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 view, waiting for some time before reproducing is essentially in order to be financially capable of child-rearing.
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,late family life can be detrimental to the female as she could attain
menopause
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 unnoticed which can prevent her from reproduction.
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, when you are patiently waiting for God's blessing on your hustle, the date of birth is increasing
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 ageing can not be prevented. When a woman gets to that state of
menopause
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, reproduction stops.
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 having offspring at a young.
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, delay of mutation is not advice able as it could be a threat to human health. Conclusively, the mutation in late life is beneficial for our offspring to have a good upbringing same as childbearing in early life to prevent
menopause
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 unawareness.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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