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People nowadays tends to have children at old ages. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantage.

#people #children #ages #outweigh
In recent
time
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, people are likely to give
birth
 to their offspring that an older
age
.
Although
 having children at old might be detrimental to their
health
an
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various
complications
 can arise.
However
, it
enable
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 the guardian to be mentally prepared and financially stable .
Which
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I believe it
outweigh
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 the drawbacks as
complications
 can be reversed with adequate medical treatment.
However
,
lack
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 of stable income can lead to
poor
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a poor
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 upbringing
of
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 the child. On the one hand, the drawbacks of
having
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giving
birth
at
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in
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 old
age
 can
leads
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lead
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 to
complications
 like eclampsia which is caused
as a result
 of hormonal imbalances which
is
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are
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 common
at
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in
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 old
age
.
However
,
this
 is detrimental to
health
 and
as a
result
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,result
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 it can
leads
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lead
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 to
Caesarian
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a Caesarian
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 section.
For instance
, A woman at 40 tends to give
birth
 to multiple
gestation
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gestations
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at
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in
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 the long run,
Caesarian
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the Caesarian
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 section was done and her chances of survival
is
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are
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 low
due to
hemorrhage
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haemorrhage
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.
Therefore
,
given
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giving
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birth
at
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in
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 old
age
 is detrimental to
health
.
On the other hand
, the benefit of giving
birth
 at older
age
 include mental preparedness and financial stability.
That is
 , the individual parent will be fully aware of what to face and how to deal with those challenges and
as well as
 money to cater for them will be
ready
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readily
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 available.
For instance
, 85% of Nigerians that gave
birth
 at old
age
 give their children sound education and provision of all
there
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their
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 needs
an
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and
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 wants at appropriate
time
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times
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.
Hence
, giving
birth
at
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in
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 old
age
 enhance quality lifestyles. In conclusion, giving
birth
 to offspring that old
age
 can be detrimental to
health
as a result
 of
complications
 at might occur and can
also
 enhance quality ways of life due
adequate
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to adequate
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 financial income.
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