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Many people tend to have kids at old age Do the advantages outweighs the disadvantages

In
this
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 present world,most people are likely to have their
children
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 when they’re old.
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giving birth late comes with some problems,it helps the guardian to train their
kids
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 well and they are
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 able to provide for all the needs of their
children
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 which I believe outweighs the disadvantages because the problems can be solved with adequate medical care. Giving birth at late age helps the
parents
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 to train their
children
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 with discipline.Older
parents
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 tend to build
children
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 better than the young ones.Training of
children
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 requires
guardians
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 that are mentally stable because it comes with lots of challenges.From research,older
parents
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 are more mentally stable than young ones because they have been through so many things in life.So they train their babies based on experience which can assist them to build mentally stable
children
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 which can
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 assist them academically and even later in life.It
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 gives their
parents
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 peace of mind because they know they have trained their
children
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 well and they won't have to regret
later
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,giving birth at late age helps
guardians
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 to be able to provide for all the needs of their
kids
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.Most people become financially stable in their old age,which helps them to have all they need to take care of their
children
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 .Taking care of
kids
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 requires having enough money to buy food and clothes for the
children
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.Young
guardians
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 might not find it easy to pay all the bills because they’re still struggling to get money.
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there are
also
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 young
guardians
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 that are financially stable,they are few because most people between ages 20-30 are always still struggling to get funds. In conclusion,It is important to have
children
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 at the right time when there is enough time and money to cater to and teach the
kids
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.
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 of struggling
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 the
children
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 and exposing them to suffering,which might later affect them in life.

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