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People nowadays tend to have children at older ages. Do the advantages to this outweigh the disadvantages

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Recently many
folks
 decide to give birth in old
age
due to
 financial independence and maturity to cope with the stress that comes with childbearing, thou
infertility
 and congenital abnormalities are more in old
age
 .The benefits are more than the disadvantages, I will expatiate on these in my upcoming paragraphs with relevant examples
To begin
 with, older
people
 are financial independence and they can face the financial challenges that come with childbearing without looking up to family and friends for assistance unlike the young
folks
 and they will be able to give quality and adequate care needed for the children, more so they are physically, emotionally and psychologically mature to cope with the stress that comes with childbearing, their reproductive system to is mature for childbearing, moving on older
folks
 are mature enough to ensure discipline and training of their children die to experience compared to younger ones.
Furthermore
, in as much there are benefits of giving birth at an older
age
, it comes with some challenges too, there is a high rate of
infertility
 in older
folks
due to
 hormonal imbalance,
also
 the level of congenital abnormality is common in
people
 of older
age
 compare to young
folks
 and secondary
infertility
 is another issue with old
people
 too. In conclusion,
people
 decide to give birth in old
age
due to
 financial independence, maturity and adequate care which are necessary for childbearing and are lacking in younger
people
while
 the negative effects are
infertility
, and congenital abnormalities which are not common in young
folks
.
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