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In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.

#future #nobody #wiil #newspapers #books
Thanks to
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advancement of the technology, humans now have a remarkable
ways
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way
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 to access unlimited data from the
Internet
. It can be observed that a large number of individuals drawing attention towards the social platform. As far as I
concerned
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that
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, I partly agree with the above statement I will discuss my pinpoints
with
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in
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 detail in a forthcoming paragraph.
To begin
 with, it is well -
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a decomented
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decomented
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documented
 fact that, the
internet
 provides people
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with
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satisfactory data related to their particular topics.
For instance
, people who are seeking
for
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apply
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details about a certain topic related to their subjects,
they
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obtain massive information from the
Internet
. Social apps
provides
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 a bunch of websites that are very useful for human resources.
Furthermore
, Students used electronic devices for attending online or physical classes rather than
carry
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bundle
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bundles
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 of books.
For instance
, Chinese students have to learn five different subjects a day in university so it is difficult for them to carry a bag on
daily
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 basis
that
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which
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 cause problems
such
 as
backpain
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back pain
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 and
exhaust
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.
Thus
, it is
undeniable
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an undeniable
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 fact that
latest
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the latest
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 technology
make
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makes
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 human lives easier than past. They can get any detail within minutes from the
Internet
. On the other side, people who are elder and uneducated
they
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faced many difficulties in their
live
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lives
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 for understand
features
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the features
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 and functions of the
Internet
. So they prefer to read
newspaper
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the newspaper
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 rather
tha
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than
 electronic devices.
Furthermore
, electronic devices cause many
uncommuntable
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uncountable
uncomfortable
 diseases
such
 as headaches and eyesight issues. To recapitulate,
latest
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the latest
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innovation
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innovations
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 make human lives comfortable they used to search about different topics and get information. But for younger and elders it
difficult
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is difficult
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 to understand its uses so
newspaper
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newspapers
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 will
also
 be available in future with the
Internet
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