Write a passage about the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city

i
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will share about the benefit and drawbacks of living in the town. in
this
case, the benefit of living in the
city
where there
are
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is
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much
of
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apply
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public
transportation
and many get a job is easier than living in a rural environment. The drawback when
people
live in
the
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a
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metropolis is noise pollution and crowded roads.
to begin
with, the benefit of living in a
city
where
people
is easier to other places with public shipping,
such
as train, bus, plane, trans-Jakarta, taxi, and many more.
in addition
, Online
transportation
like bikes, or cars online. so, when
public
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the public
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arrive
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arrives
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in the
the
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city
, it is easy to another destination. because in the
city
society
consider
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considers
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getting a job who move to the
city
, because
people
argue that
city
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the city
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is a town has opportunities get a job and many accompany in the
city
,
whereas
many
people
are easier get work in the
city
than population living in the rural environment.
for instance
, based experience, in my office
i
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I
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have friends from the rural environment as in Tangerang and the location office in Jakarta,
in addition
, every morning
i
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I
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usually see the community from Bogor go to Jakarta. in Indonesia, Jakarta is a popular township to get employment and many companies there.
furthermore
, there are some drawbacks if
nation
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a nation
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living in the
city
. In
this
case,
i
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I
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will
divided
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divide
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two disadvantages of living in the
city
. In the
city
,
the
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apply
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corruption is the highest noise pollution, because in the
city
there are
group
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groups
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and some
association
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associations
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cause
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that cause
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industrial deterioration, not only from companies,
besides
that
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but
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, from
shipment
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shipments
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,
that is
cause noise abuse because of emissions public
transportation
as private vehicles as motorbikes, cars, busses,
train
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trains
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. in the
city
is
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are
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very crowded roads so
this
is cause a traffic jam and the number of vehicles in the
city
is higher than in rural and make
people
easily stressed. in conclusion, the advantage of living in a
city
is
that is
convenient and simple to get
transportation
and the disadvantage is living in the
city
, many
community
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communities
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get roar corruption and traffic light.
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