IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The graph below shows the average numbers of Vietnamese students studying in France, Russia and America between 2000 and 2015.

The graph below shows the average numbers of Vietnamese students studying in France, Russia and America between 2000 and 2015.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The line graph gives information about studying average
number
Use synonyms
Use synonyms
Vietnamese
Change preposition
of Vietnamese
show examples
students
Use synonyms
 in
France
Use synonyms
,
Russia
Use synonyms
 and USA. The units are measured in millions
in
Change preposition
from
show examples
 2000 to 2015.
Overall
Linking Words
,
it is clear that
Linking Words
 the
number
Use synonyms
 of
Vietnamese
Use synonyms
students
Use synonyms
 studying in America went up sharply over the period shown.
However
Linking Words
, the same
figure
Use synonyms
 for
France
Use synonyms
 and
Russia
Use synonyms
 witnessed a fluctuation. The data of
average
Change the article
an average
the average
show examples
number
Use synonyms
 of
Vietnamese
Use synonyms
students
Use synonyms
 studying in America increased marginally less than 2 in 2000 to 5 in 2015. And reach
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
pick 5. The same data of
Vietnamese
Use synonyms
students
Use synonyms
 studying in
France
Use synonyms
 and
Russia
Use synonyms
 experienced a fluctuation. The
number
Use synonyms
 of average
Vietnamese
Use synonyms
students
Use synonyms
 studying in
Frence
Correct your spelling
France
 reduced slowly from less than 4 in 2000 to less than 3 in 2005.
This
Linking Words
figure
Use synonyms
 stagnated at less than 3 from 2005 to 2010. The
number
Use synonyms
 of
Vietnamese
Use synonyms
students
Use synonyms
 studying in
France
Use synonyms
 increased significantly from less than 3 in 2010 to more than 4 in 2015. The same
figure
Use synonyms
 of
Vietnamese
Use synonyms
students
Use synonyms
 studying in
Russia
Use synonyms
 decreased sharply from 3 in 2000 to less than 2 in 2010. The
figure
Use synonyms
 for
Vietnamese
Use synonyms
students
Use synonyms
 studying in
Russia
Use synonyms
 grew gradually from less than 2 in 2010 to less than 3 in 2015

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words number, vietnamese, students, france, russia, figure with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: