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The graph gives information informs regarding the average of carbon dioxide emissions (per person) in four different countries, the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal, from 1967 to 2007.

The graph gives information informs regarding the average of carbon dioxide emissions (per person) in four different countries, the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal, from 1967 to 2007.
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The graph informs regarding the average of carbon dioxide emissions (per person) in four different countries, the United Kingdom,
Sweden
, Italy, and Portugal, from 1967 to 2007. In general, carbon dioxide
emission
 in the UK and
Sweden
 had downward trends,
meanwhile
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 Italy and Portugal had opposite trends . Regarding the UK, the
emission
 was the highest among the other countries over the year even though it was dipping to roughly below 9 metric tonnes in 2007. In
Sweden
, there was rising
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emission
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emissions
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 from 1967 until it reached its peak in 1977 with slightly more than 10 metric tonnes. After that, the
emission
 was falling dramatically by roughly almost
a
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half.
In contrast
, Italy and Portugal were rising
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emission
 respectively yet, in Italy, from 1997 to 2007 the
emission
 was static
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 below 8 metric tonnes. Meanwhile, the rising in Portugal does not change the fact that they still
be
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 the country with
least
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emission
 of carbon dioxide compared to the others. But, in 2007, the
emission
 in Portugal roughly had the same value with
Sweden
.
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