The maps below shows changes that took place in youngsville in new zealand over a 25-year period from 1980 to 2005.

The maps below shows changes that took place in youngsville in new zealand over a 25-year period from 1980 to 2005.
The map depicts the changing states of Youngsville in New Zealand during the period between 1980 and 2005. In general, it is clear the information
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the two maps reveals a change from a largely rural to a mainly urban landscape. In 1980, the town was a much greener residential area with a large number of trees and individual houses,but during the next 25
years
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the town witnessed a number of considerable changes. The most noticeable is that all of the trees south of the
River
Alanah were chopped down, with all the houses along the railway line being knocked down to make way for skyscrapers.
Moreover
, a new industrial estate with factories and warehouses was erected around the airport and school. Only a few trees north of the
river
remained.The forest
cleared
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to make way for a park, a golf course and car parking facilities.
Further
developments were the construction of a stadium near the
north-east
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corner of the lake and a new stretch of railway from the
river
running directly north. A marina was
also
built at the mouth of the
river
.
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