The maps indicate how the town center of Islip is expected to be redeveloped from its current setup.

The maps indicate how the town center of Islip is expected to be redeveloped from its current setup.
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The maps illustrate how Youngsville in New Zealand changed from 1980 to 2005.
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, it is obvious that Youngsville experienced significant modernization. The most noticeable differences between the two maps are the transformation from a rural area to an industrial city with numerous factories. In 1980, Youngsville was divided into two areas that were connected by a bridge running through the Alanah River. In the next 25 years, both zones witnessed many significant changes in numerous industrial zones. Along the railway in the East, most of the houses and trees were destroyed and replaced by buildings. Meanwhile, schools and airports remained untouched in the West and South-West.
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, the woodland surrounding them was cut down to make way for factories and warehouses for workers to increase their salaries.
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, the houses along the coast were destroyed to make an expansion of the railway and a stadium which bring convenience to commuting. The government added two parking areas around a stadium on the top right-hand corner.
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, there were a few trees that remained existed that surrounded a lake in the North which had more activities in 2005
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as canoe, golf, etc..
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the hospital was erected close to the lake area.
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, the marine was constructed to the right of the railway.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "besides".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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