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some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is the better to try and improve such situations. Discuss these both views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that acknowledging an undesirable situation is to be the best;
however
, others believe that ultimate attempts are a better solution in these cases. In my opinion, not surrendering to
life
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 challenges and difficulties are always the best choice. Many
people
 consider
this
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 fact that all the phenomena in
life
 are under the control of destiny.
Consequently
, humankind does not play a significant role in it. Take unwilling occupation,
for example
, they might try to adapt themselves to their current situation and consider it as a faithful job. Another point is that
,
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 these
people
 are not tempted enough to make a change in their
life
.
In other words
, they are aimless during their lifespan, and their viewpoint of
world
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 is purposeless.
On the other hand
, some
people
 hold
this
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 opinion that being subordinate and dependent
to
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 some unwanted situations is totally unexpected. It means that are responsible for their
life
 which has been given to each individual just once.
Ones
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,
as a consequence
, should nurture their talents and expand their competence
of
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 alerting harmful events. In my view,
for instance
, each person might solve their lack of money by improving on their specialized skills.
Then
 search for a relevant organization or if it is
faverable
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favourable
 and
accessable
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accessible
 become self-employed. In conclusion, there are some who believe that
people
 should endure every aspect of their
life
 but I would argue that everybody has a selective power and should be in charge of every dimension of
life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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