The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make conparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make conparisons where relevant.
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The charts depict the household
ownership
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of electrical appliances percentage-wise and the number of
hours
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spent doing house chores per family per week in a country from 1920-2019.
Overall
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,
ownership
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of
the
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apply
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electrical appliances showed an upward trend with increased
years
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.
In contrast
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, the time
spend
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spent
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doing housework saw a decline over the
years
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. At the start of the period,
refrigerator
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ownership
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was the least with approximately 2%
while
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most families had vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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and washing
machine
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machines
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at 30% and 40% respectively. After four decades, 70% of the population made use of vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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and washing
machine
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machines
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respectively
while
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refrigerator
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refrigerators
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saw over 80% increase to reach 90% in usage in the same period. Washing
machine
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machines
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showed fluctuations in the
last
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39
years
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as
it
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they
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had a reduction in popularity to just over 60% in 1980 and
then
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increased gradually to just over 70%
at the end
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of the period. Interestingly,
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refrigerator
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the refrigerator
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percentage plateaued at 10% in the
last
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39
years
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and
ownership
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of vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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rose steadily to the same level
with
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as
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refrigerator
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refrigerators
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in the
last
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19years. Regarding the time
spend
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spent
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doing domestic
works
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work
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at home, in 1920, 50
hours
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was spent per household to do domestic work in a week and
this
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saw a marginal decline to 20
hours
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after
40years
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40 years
. It remained within the range of 10
hours
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-20
hours
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in subsequent
years
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until it reached 11
hours
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in the year 2019.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words ownership, hours, years, refrigerator with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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