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More and more people are expected to be living in the urban centres in the future. What problems can be caused? Should government encourage people to settle outside the city?

#people #centres #future #government #city
No doubt , it is
true
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 fact that numerous
peope
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people
 give more priority to
live
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living
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 in the cities in the upcoming days as
number
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a number
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 of facilities are available over there .
Nonetheless
,
this
 trend might be caused many
problem
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problems
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 in future related to unemployment and
pollution
.
This
 essay would briefly discuss the various factors and solutions
along with
partinent
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prominent
instance
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instances
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 in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with the first and foremost point that in
city
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the city
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 everything is available near to house door .Needless to say ,
people
 can easily get
job
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jobs
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 and better education
while
 living in the city .The fact cannot be denied , if the population significantly increases in the urban centre .
Therefore
, it cause
the
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problem for upcoming generations .
For example
, if all the spare space
cover
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is cover
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 with
home
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a home
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then
new
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 generation how to make their house in the city . Meanwhile, the
pollution
 level
also
 rising because all the trees are clear to construct new houses , and in
cities
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,cities
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 everyone
feel
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 comfortable
doing
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traveling
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travelling
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 with their own Personal belongings
rathan
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rather
 than Public and governmental transport. Unless the government cannot takes action to
control
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itcontrol
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 , it would not handle
effectively
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it effectively
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 .
Firstly
 ,
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the authority
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authority
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authorities
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 have to provide each and every service in the villages , so that
people
 can
happy
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happily
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 live
over
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in
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 their native town without any problem and they
did
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do
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 not feel to move from
countryside
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the countryside
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 area to town as well .
Apart from
this
 ,lawmakers must provide better education and work facilities
while
 living in
the
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rural area ,
consequently
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,consequently
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people
 never shift from
the
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small towns to big cities .
Moreover
 ,
government
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the government
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 have to encourage
the
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people
 to
used
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use
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 public transport systems
instead
 of Personal vehicles to reduce the
pollution
 level in their area .  In conclusion,
although
 is the best way to stay updated with
modren
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modern
 technology,
however
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 the negative effects cannot be denied
such
 as
pollution
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the pollution
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 level incline ,
this
 can
be tackle
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be tackled
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 with
the
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government support.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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