The chart below compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The following graph chart illustrates the
time
Australian parents invested in helping their offspring in four different activities in 2013. It seems that
mothers
spent most of their
time
on
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dressing their kids and helping them with their homework which took approximately 75% and 60% of their
time
respectively. They,
next,
put just above 40% of their
time
preparing the children for bed
,
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and spent the least amount of
time
on
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playing with them.
On the other hand
,
fathers
did not spend much
time
with their children. Interestingly, the highest amount
time
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they spent with their kids was aiding them with homework which only accounts for 10% of their
time
. All things considered, when
mothers
and
fathers
joined forces, they spent much more quality
time
with their sons and daughters. Seemingly,
mothers
and
fathers
chose to spend 70% of their
time
playing with their kids, an amount
that is
almost three times and fifteen times more than the
time
mothers
and
fathers
spent
seperately
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separately
in turn.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, mothers, fathers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • time spent
  • Australian mothers
  • fathers
  • helping
  • children
  • activities
  • reading
  • homework
  • playing sports
  • general play
  • comparison
  • 2013
  • significantly
  • difference
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