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Young people’s ideas and attitudes are different from those of their parents and grandparents. What are the differences? What problems may be caused?

#people’s #attitudes #parents #grandparents #differences
No doubt , nowadays the way of looking towards the world is totally changed from
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 few years ,
however
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 the question is what is the difference between
in
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the ideas and
attitude
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attitudes
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 of
the
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young
children
 from their
parents
 and
grandparents
 . In
this
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i
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 will briefly explain the difference and
problems
 which causes in between them . To commence with the first and foremost point that
due to
 advancement of technology school going
children
 can easily
gainthe
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gain the
gain
 knowledge about various things about different culture and
traditional
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 and apply
same
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the same
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 thing in their life . Needless to say ,
children
are study
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 in CBSE school and other international schools in which they met with numerous
children
 with different backgrounds and they can
exchanged
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 their ideas and through with each other
whereas
 , in
parents
 and
grandparents
time
 ,they just taught in
local
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 school with limited resources and in their
time
 the advance Technology is
also
 not introduced in each part of the world .Understandably, they
having
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 less knowledge about
new
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 gadget which create
huge
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 difference between them.
Nonetheless
 ,
this
 causes many
problems
 in the relationship
of
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grandparents
,
parents
 and
children
.
Firstly
 , the major issue is that
children
 are unable to share their through and personal
problems
 with their
parents
 with open
mind
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minds
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 as they did not feel comfortable with them . Meanwhile ,
the
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 current generation, people give more
preferences
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preference
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 to modern culture and style ,
on the other hand
 ,
parents
 give more priority to their own
culture
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 values .
consequently
,the bond between both
of
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them becomes weak and
children
 start living
separate
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 from their
parents
 .
Moreover
,
children
not
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 give proper
time
 and care to their
grandparents
 as well . In conclusion, I would like to restate that with the development of technology the
grap
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gap
 between
two
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 generations become huge which causes multiple
problems
 in their relationship
such
 as,
children
 avoid to stay with their
parents
 and
grandparents
while
,
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 they spend most of
time
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their time
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 with their agemates .
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