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Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Sports
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 play an essential role in everyone’s life as those activities affect
people
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’s health positively and make them feel better.
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 some
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 think that not every kind of sport should be accepted by governments as it can be risky sometimes,
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 others believe that individuals should have a right to choose. I agree, that authorities should let
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part in dangerous
sports
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, because it can be beneficial for their mental health. On the one hand, a huge amount of
people
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 think that extreme activities should be prevented
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 because most of them are not
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.
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 it is hard for these
people
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 to be relaxed and enjoy the process
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while
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 doing some dangerous kinds of
sports
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 as they are afraid of getting traumatized or even dying.
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, nowadays,
people
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 do everything to prevent accidents and decrease risks to a minimum and
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this
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reason
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,
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 disagrees with
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 statement.
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, skiing resorts in Austria provide
people
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 with special equipment and medical help,
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 employees are educated for giving first aid help.
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, there are those, who think that extreme
sports
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 should be legal, because it can make help to relieve stress and
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 make
people
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 happier. It is true that those activities can be beneficial for
people
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’s mental health, because of adrenaline, which releases into the human body in dangerous conditions and reduces the hormones of stress.
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, it helps
people
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 to deal with negative emotions and feel better.
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,
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 essay agrees with
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 point of view.
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, recent surveys claim that 80% of climbers agree that mountain climbing makes them feel less anxious In conclusion,
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 essay agrees that extreme
sports
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 should be unlimited as it’s not as risky as it was a few days ago and it
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 gives
people
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 positive feelings.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • severe injuries
  • fatalities
  • base jumping
  • bull running
  • extreme skiing
  • safeguard
  • well-being
  • regulating
  • avoidable harm
  • healthcare costs
  • burdening
  • personal freedom
  • autonomy
  • training
  • equipment
  • mitigated
  • personal satisfaction
  • mental health benefits
  • resilience
  • adventure
  • assess risks
  • public safety
  • unnecessary healthcare costs
  • outright bans
  • balanced approach
  • stringent safety standards
  • mandatory training sessions
  • adequately informed
  • safeguarding
  • public health
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