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The graph below shows the changes in production (millions) of three products in a garment factory from 1990 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the changes in production (millions) of three products in a garment factory from 1990 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line
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graph
 compares the production of different products in a
garmant
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garment
 factory between 1990 and 2010.
Overall
, the suit had been produced the most in 1990
,
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 but became second place in 2010.
Suit
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The suit
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 was produced the most in
garment
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a garment
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 factory in 1990.
Beginning
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 from less than 15
million
, and increased
dramaticlly
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dramatically
 before
reached
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 the peak of 23
millions
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million
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 production in 1995. 1995
yaer
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year
years
 experienced a steady fall, which returned to just over 15
million
 in 2005.
Although
 there was a reverse in 2010, it became the second largest amount in 2010, with 20
milliom
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million
. In general, coats
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 the upwards since 1990, with less than 10
million
. From 1990 to 2005, there was a considerable rise, and the number of coats is over than suits in 2005 and, which is made up more than 20
million
. The factory produced the second highest amount of merchandise in 1990 was dresses(10
million
). From 1990 to 2005,
the
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dress production experienced a
fluctuate
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, followed by a slight increase in 2010, with 15
million
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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