Increasing number of students are choosing to study abroad. To what extent does this trend benefit the students themselves and the countries involved. What are the drawbacks?

In the
last
few years, the number of
students
who prefer to study abroad is increasing,
specially
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in some countries like China or India
that
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own a very high population, or even a
country
called Iran where
people
suffer to live in there because of their bad economical situation.
This
essay will discuss how beneficial is studying abroad for
students
and
also
involved countries with some drawbacks that include
for
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each side.
Firstly
, studying abroad requires a strong academic background. Only
people
can
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get permission to study in
another
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country
who are at
high level
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inn
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terms of literacy,
that
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is why
they
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are constantly trying to improve themselves in their major.
For example
, a person who intends to immigrate will find a higher academic level than a person who studies unmotivated and can achieve more
ideal
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for her future,
such
as a better job and better income.
Secondly
, countries that
makes
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more requests to attract foreign
students
, accept the best
students
in all fields or any skill.
This
will cause deserving
people
enter
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that
country
, settle there, find work after
graduations
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graduation
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and contribute to the development of that
country
in many different sectors; which is more like if a farmer buys
a
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land in a good climate area or a dry and salty area, it is definitely more likely to produce a crop in a good climate, even if more money is spent on it.
Nevertheless
, studying abroad may cause
some
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bad influence
in
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foreign
students
. They have to leave their families, their cultures, their friends and
also
their own
country
which may even involve them with depression or even cause them to get injured mentally in the middle of their studies to
such
an extent that they return to their own
country
so they just wasted their time and have
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from the beginning.
This
example is seen more in
people
who have strong emotional
attachment
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attachments
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to their families and friends.
Moreover
, with the increase in
number
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of foreign
students
to study,
then
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and then
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stay and work in the involved
country
, less space is
crated
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created
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for the
people
of that
country
in terms of education and employment;
this
issue causes
people
to protest and riot in that
country
, which disturbs the order and safety there,
for example
in Iran with increasing the number of Afghan
people
in there, Iranian
people
that they are staling job opportunities and should return to their
country
.
To conclude
, as I consider despite the difficulties and problems that may arise for a student by studying abroad, if that student does his best, he can achieve better living conditions than before.
On the other hand
,
a
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good progress was made for the involved
country
,
while
it doesn’t matter whether the person who made the progress is a foreigner or citizen, the progress of a society helps the all
people
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there.
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