The chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.
The bar chart illustrates twelve countries in terms of the
overall
amount of metals that they have won at the Olympic
games.
Overall
, it has been that the USA experienced an upward trend in the total amount of Olympic
medals
whereas
Japan was the lowest rate among other countries.
The USA included 900 gold
medals
, 700 silver and 650 bronze. The total number was 2,300 Olympic
medals
. In addition
, the Soviet Union won a total of about 1,000 medals
. There was around 300 gold
, 200 silver and 250 bronze. And in the UK, gold
, silver and bronze rates increased slowly as in the USA, and the Soviet Union.
Only 6 countries rose to 500 Olympic
medals
. There was Sweden, Australia, Hungary, East Germany, Japan and China were the same degree of gold
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