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The chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.

The chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.
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The bar chart illustrates twelve countries in terms of the
overall
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 amount of metals that they have won at the
Olympic
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 games.
Overall
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, it has been that the USA experienced an upward trend in the total amount of
Olympic
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medals
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whereas
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 Japan was the lowest rate among other countries. The USA included 900
gold
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medals
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, 700 silver and 650 bronze. The total number was 2,300
Olympic
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medals
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.
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, the Soviet Union won a total of about 1,000
medals
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. There was around 300
gold
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, 200 silver and 250 bronze. And in the UK,
gold
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, silver and bronze rates increased slowly as in the USA, and the Soviet Union. Only 6 countries rose to 500
Olympic
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medals
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. There was Sweden, Australia, Hungary, East Germany, Japan and China were the same degree of
gold
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 for 150.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words olympic, medals, gold with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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