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some people say that history is not important. some say it is. describe both views.

#people #history #say
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 agree. ‏Finding information has become
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as well as
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resources
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feature
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fundamental
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 friends and family ‏Their lives
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make the
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 has a vast impact
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 our life and everything related to it make life much easier than
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 decades.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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