Some people think that happiness is considered a lot of money do you agree or disagree?

Now during my life. I have
watch
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it
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a lot of
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which I persuaded to buy but now I'd like to talk about an
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which
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really attracted to me and buying
this
product
and it was about 10 modern technological devices because technology has been developing day by day and many teenagers and adults have needs have their own technological devices
such
as
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is computers or a laptop and it was
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a laptop and as I remembered a couple of months ago, I have college a lot of money which I purpose to buy
a
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any
product
and I prefer to buy about
this
product
because
this
product
at the
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was shown by TV because I'm a person who really into watching TV and a lot of time I come across some kind of
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and my parents and me what should
this
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together and my father recommended me to buy
this
product
from
this
unusual
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and it will there are lots of good things about
this
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. First of all the cost of very cheaper and from than others and the
product
is very comfortable for me
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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