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some people believe govt must apply high taxes to provide good public service to everyone. Give your opinion

#people #govt #taxes #service
As human ,beings we all like to spend our lives in a luxurious way. Many
people
 think, to have better infrastructure facilities, it is a must to pay
taxes
 to the
authorities
. I believe it is our responsibility to pay
taxes
 to the
government
. On the one hand, to develop a country the
government
 need enough money. All the countries around the world collect funds from the citizens through
taxes
. All the citizens are not included in paying
this
 ,
moreover
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 there is a margin to include in the tax pay list.
For example
,recently in Srilanka, the
authorities
 decrease
this
 tax level and the community who earn more than one hundred thousand per month is on the
listConsequently
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list consequently
 they are entered into special facilities given by the
government
 for taxpayers as urgent hospitalisation, asking for medicines and so on. If nations are not cheating with the
government
 and doing their work well they can develop infrastructure facilities, well-being of prisoners, develop public places like hospitals, schools and so on.
On the other hand
,
people
 are not willing to pay
taxes
, because of the faults of the
authorities
. They do not try to develop roads, hospitals, and schools. The workers who work in public services
,
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 are not willing to do their service
according to
 the rules and regulations. because they have to follow the rules that come from high
authorities
. That's why
people
 do not prefer to pay
taxes
. if the
government
 does its job well everyone will help them. ,
,
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Furthermore
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 for several decades the
authorities
 only do things for the rest of their lives and do not think about
people
.
To conclude
,I believe it is our duty to pay
taxes
 to the
government
 to develop our country.
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