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Global warming is actually not real and politicians and media should spend time debating more serious issues such as how to decrease poverty. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement?

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It is argued that it is not an important problem Global warming,
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 the essential trouble is to reduce
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 politicians and media ought to think about how to improve
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's life. I completely disagree with
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the environmental problem is the primary reason
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that when we prevent
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the
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pollution
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 planet
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 we can live happily without troubles. The essay will be discussed why Global warming is more important than other problems and provided relevant examples from my experience. Nowadays, the weather conditions cause extremely hot and cold days around the world.
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 need to move
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 countries because of being bad climate in their country.
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, African
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water and famine in order to rise heat intensity.
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 they are living with trouble
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 they are finding it difficult to be
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, most
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people
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 do not think about Global warming which is the primary reason in our social life. They consider that politicians are media should only reduce
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 they believe that it is
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 important problem than Global warming.
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, if we should solve to improve environmental trouble, individuals in the world can live happily.
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 it
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impacts
acts
to decrease
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. In conclusion, most
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the
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people
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 think that decreasing
poverty
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 is the most important factor.They believe authorities should improve
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's
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 than environmental problems. I do not agree with
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 idea because environmental issues are more important problems than other ones.

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