Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?
Recently, plenty of people want to be self-employed
instead
of working for a firm. From my point of view, this
may be related to occupation conditions and salary. I believe, in the future, this
situation may cause bad qualities in the sectors. I would like to explain my thoughts.
First of all, from my experiences, I realized that the majority of workers are not satisfied with their pay. What they believe is they deserve a better salary because of jobs' toughness. This
situation forces most of them, who have a budget, to initiate their own business thus
they would at least do their own work. For instance
, I am a veterinarian but I prefer to open my own clinic because of the difficulties of the special sector.
Secondly
, I strongly believe that raising the number of self-employed can lead to a decline in the quality of the services. Because everybody is going to own their office, they will launch to give a service with lower price in order to attract the customers. This
may look charming at first but eventually, it possibly causes a lack of quality. For example
, also
Veterinarians who have special clinics have started to examine animals at half price which seems a good chance for animal owners but their expectancies from vets are not satisfying them.
In a nutshell, it seems to me that changing negatively, companies have changed the sectors and doing own job may seem charming but is not promising a brilliant financial.Submitted by fatmanurdonertas on
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Your introduction should introduce the topic and outline the main points to be discussed. Each body paragraph should explore a main point with supporting details and examples. A conclusion should summarise the main points and restate your position clearly.
task achievement
Develop your ideas more thoroughly. While you have presented two main reasons for people choosing self-employment, you could further elaborate on these reasons with more specific details and analysis. For instance, discuss how the desire for a better salary could contribute to the decision to become self-employed and how this might affect the industry.
task achievement
Your essay must address both parts of the question fully, not only the reasons behind choosing self-employment but also the possible disadvantages. Ensure to allocate your word count to accurately and comprehensively respond to each part of the question.
coherence cohesion
Try to use a range of vocabulary and sentence structures to effectively convey your points. Aim for clarity and precision in your language to make your arguments more convincing and easier to follow.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...