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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Today’s methods of agriculture are improving and farmers earn higher amounts of produce but already there are many hungry
people
 in poor
countries
. It has some reasons and
also
 some solutions. On the one hand, a lot of
people
 around the world do have not any food for eating
although
 we know that nowadays we have high levels of agriculture industry around the globe. It has some reasons. First of all, there are limited
countries
 that have suitable conditions for farming so some
countries
 have enough agricultural products for their nations.
Also
 because they have poor economies their governments can not buy food from other
countries
 so the
people
 are being hungry.
Secondly
,
people
 who have suitable farmland want to earn higher benefits from their products so they sell their goods at higher prices.
Finally
, they are not any organizations or companies that collecting helps
people
’s help for hungry children ,
Also
 government doesn’t support companies to encourage them for doing something for poor
people
 around the world.
On the other hand
, when
people
 know that a lot of
people
 on
this
 planet do have not any food, they should try to find a way to help them.
For example
,
people
 can establish an organization and provide free different services to poor
people
 ,
Also
 governments should protect them. In conclusion, in today’s ,globe there are many poor and hungry
people
although
 the industry of agriculture has significant improvement in the
last
 few years. It has some reasons and some solutions that I mentioned above in
this
 essay.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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