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You are leaving your job and would like to recommend your friend apply for your position. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: · describe the job · explain the reason you are leaving · tell him/her why you would recommend the job to them

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Dear Jen,
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 letter is to recommend you for my position as a
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 manager
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 CaptainBiz. Here, the day-to-day task of a
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 manager is to identify customer problems and provide solutions by
alinging
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aligning
 with the tech and marketing team. There is a lot of stakeholder management happening here because of rapid
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changes
 in requirements, so a
product
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 manager has to perform extreme prioritizations on a daily basis. I'll be vacating
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 position by the end of
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 month. After 5 years in the company, I have decided to move on to a new role as
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 Lead in a fintech startup based out of the USA. As you know, I don't like to stay comfortable in a place,
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 I required a change in scenario and
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, the switch. I'd really encourage you to give
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 a thought because
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 company is currently in a hyper-growth phase and has just closed a Series-C funding round. There is a lot of capital in the company and knowing you, you'd love the opportunity to wear multiple hats and be in the thick of things. Looking forward to hearing back from you. Best wishes, Nilesh
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coherence cohesion
While your letter is well-structured, using more linking words and phrases can enhance the logical flow between paragraphs.
task achievement
You may wish to elaborate slightly on what makes the job satisfying or rewarding on a personal level to strengthen your recommendation.
task achievement
You have clearly described the job responsibilities and the reason for leaving, which makes the letter informative.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are polite and appropriate for the context, creating a friendly and professional tone.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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