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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

#countries #people #history #house #research
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Nowadays people are curious to find out about the story of their
house
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 or building,
such
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 as
apartment
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the apartment
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 or condominium where they live in. Even though they do it
with
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in
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 many ways including asking
with
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strangers around their home or
with
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police near their home which makes
inconvenient
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it inconvenient
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 in
neighbourhood
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the neighbourhood
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, I believe it is justified to seek
what
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apply
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the
history
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 of their home with the aim of safety. To start with, in
this
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 modern’s era, people who buy their
house
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by
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via
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 online
platform
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platforms
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 do not know about the experience and
history
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from
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of
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 the former
owner
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 of the
house
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.
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, they are intended to purchase the
house
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 which they want if the land of the
house
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 is legal and free from a criminal.
In addition
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, in order to do
this
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, they have to find the background of the
house
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.
For example
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, based on experience
from
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apply
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my uncle,
he
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apply
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was keen on
to buy
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buying
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 his own in 2017 and the price was relatively cheap when he was surfing on the internet. Meanwhile, he did not know what happened before he owned his
house
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 so
that
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apply
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he browsed
from
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the internet for the purpose of getting information
of
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about
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 the
house
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 and he asked his neighbour. The information that he got told him that the murder had happened before he bought the
house
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 and he felt anxious after hearing that.
On the other hand
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, in my country, the buyer of the
house
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 are educated
from
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by
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 the government and the law which rules of the agreement has already
legitimated
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been legitimated
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 since there were many reports from the community about they did not have
an
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access to look up the information.
For instance
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, the news from Metrotv (Indonesia news media) once reported the
owner
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 of
the
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a
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house
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 was killed by
stranger
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a stranger
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 and the family
from
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of
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 the
owner
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 told
to
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apply
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the media that they got restricted from the previous
owner
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 about the story,
therefore
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 the news from that had made the government govern the right for the purchaser to find out the
history
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.
To sum up
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, in
this
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 modern era, people have to be careful before making
purchase
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a purchase
the purchase
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 of
the
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a
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house
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 in order to their safety. In my opinion, It is justified to seek
what
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apply
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the
history
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 of the
house
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 since they have to regard that
the
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apply
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safety is important and
government
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the government
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 in
this
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 modern’s era
have
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has
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 been aware
about
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of
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 that matter.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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