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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and tradition methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Over the
last
 few years,
convenience
food
 become more and more popular with the majority of
people
 who lives in bustling cities. They prefer to choose easier
food
 to eat,
compere
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compare
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 to conventional
food
than
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that
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 needs time to prepare.
Moreover
, some
people
 believe that packed
food
 will eventually replace homecooked
food
. I totally disagree because most
convenience
food
 is unhealthy
food
 and cause
to
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long term
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 health problem.
This
 essay will discuss the debate , and give a concluding view.
People
 who straggling in
there
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their
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 hectic life prefer to eat fast
food
 rather than
home made
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homemade
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food
. One of the disadvantages of packed
food
 is obesity. Fast
food
’s materials were already prepared for
time consuming
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, so they are not as fresh as
tradition
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food
. Tradition method let Eating fast
food
 leads to
overweight
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 and cause
long term
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 health problem. The second
disadvantages
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 of packed
food
 is that those
food
 are genetically modified
food
. those
food containing
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 genes which have been altered. Eating
convenience
food
 constantly can cause malnutrition. They will
be suffer
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 from physical weakness resulting from lack of
food
 or poor diet which is seen
at
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in
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 those
people
 who eats
prepare
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food
 more.
Although
 many
people
 still value traditional foods and methods of cooking, the trend towards smaller, dual-income households suggests that
convenience
 foods are likely to continue to grow in popularity and may very well eventually replace traditional methods of
food
 production and preparation.
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