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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Over the
last
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 few years, convenience
food
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 has become increasingly popular with most
people
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 who live in bustling cities. They prefer to choose more accessible
food
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 than conventional
food
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 that needs time to prepare.
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, some
people
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 believe that packed
food
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 will eventually replace homecooked
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. I totally disagree because most convenience
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 is unhealthy
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 and cause
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long-term
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 problem.
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 essay will discuss the debate, and give a concluding view. Traditional
food
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 is made with fresh ingredients and is healthier than traditional
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.
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,
People
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 struggling in their hectic lives prefer fast
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 to homemade
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. One of the disadvantages of packed
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 is obesity. Fast
food
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’s materials were already prepared for time-consuming, so they are not as fresh as traditional
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. Eating fast
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 leads to being overweight and causes long-term
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 problems
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 consuming traditional
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 will never substitute for fast
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 in any society.
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, most packed
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 is provided with genetically modified ingredients that have been altered and frequently have dire impacts on
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, so consuming traditional
food
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 may not be restricted by
people
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, and they will have their meals from traditional cuisines. Eating convenience
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 constantly can cause malnutrition. They will suffer from physical weakness resulting from lack of
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 or poor diet which is seen in those who eat prepared
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 more.
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, some groups are sure that eventually, packed
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 will replace traditional foods and traditional methods of cooking
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 because fast
food
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’s material is already prepared, needs less time to cook, and is cheaper than homemade
food
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.
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, fast
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 causes long-term
health
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 problems, and it seems they will never replace traditional cuisines. In conclusion, homemade
food
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 is healthier and more delicious than fast
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.
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, homemade
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 is time-consuming, but it helps to protect our bodies against different diseases, so packed
food
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 can not replace homemade
food
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.
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