Your local college is organizing an event on International Student’s Day. Write a letter to the organizer and say: •What topics would you like them to cover? •Why would it be interesting for students? • Ask questions about the arrangement

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letter to inform you that my college is going to make an International Student's Day event in Bandung on 15th June 2023. I have some suggestions for our topics about it. The first one is about " How Important English In The Future" and the second one is about "What The Impact Of Technology For Our Live". The

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is about "Live Without Religions". I thought these topics will be very interesting for young people because it based on our's real-life stories. For ,example English will useful for the young generation nowadays because people are using English every time. And

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, technology has

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effect on our lives because there are the newest things named AI that will change human

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is the religion I believe the earth will be destroyed by people if there are no religions. As a beginner, my school never celebrate an event like that. So, please help us with the arrangement. Good luck and thank you for your attention. Yours Faithfully, Sampurna

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

176 words

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Your local college is organizing an event on International Student’s Day. Write a letter to the organizer and say: •What topics would you like them to cover? •Why would it be interesting for students? • Ask questions about the arrangement

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

You recently went on a sightseeing tour which you did not enjoy. Write a letter to the manager of the tour company. In your letter: explain why you chose that particular tour explain what you did not like about the tour suggest two ways in which the tour could be improved

Nowadays, an increasing number of people with health problems are using alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their normal doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Scientific developments in farming always bring major benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many people believe that women make better parents than men and that is why they have a greater role in raising children in most societies. Others claim that men are just as good as women at parenting. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

in some countries, younger people are neglecting their right to vote. what problems does this cause and what are some of possible solutions?