Your local college is organizing an event on International Student’s Day. Write a letter to the organizer and say: •What topics would you like them to cover? •Why would it be interesting for students? • Ask questions about the arrangement

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing

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letter to inform you that my college is going to make an International Student's Day event in Bandung on 15th June 2023. I have some suggestions for our topics about it. The first one is about " How Important English In The Future" and the second one is about "What The Impact Of Technology For Our Live". The

last

is about "Live Without Religions". I thought these topics will be very interesting for young people because it based on our's real-life stories. For ,example English will useful for the young generation nowadays because people are using English every time. And

secondly

, technology has

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effect on our lives because there are the newest things named AI that will change human

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. The

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is the religion I believe the earth will be destroyed by people if there are no religions. As a beginner, my school never celebrate an event like that. So, please help us with the arrangement. Good luck and thank you for your attention. Yours Faithfully, Sampurna

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

176 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Your local college is organizing an event on International Student’s Day. Write a letter to the organizer and say: •What topics would you like them to cover? •Why would it be interesting for students? • Ask questions about the arrangement

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

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