All over the world , societies are facing a growing problem with obesity. This problem affects both children and adults. What are the reasons for this rise in obesity? How could it be tackled?
Nowadays,
obesity
has become a serious problem and more and more people
have been affected by this
. This
essay will explore the reasons for this
and how it be solved.
To begin
with, a reason for obesity
is fast-food consumption. These days are extremely common that people
do not have much time to cook,
because they are working a lot. Even, Remove the comma
apply
for
this
reason
parents give money to their children for school. So, it is easier they are buying fast food. Add a comma
,reason
Firstly
, a solution for this
is that people
to reduce fast food consumption by doing healthy meals at home, buying
their own ingredients like vegetables and fruit. Correct word choice
and buying
Furthermore
, companies and schools could offer healthy menus too without many calories.
On the other hand
, another reason is people
do not do enough exercise
. They have a sedentary lifestyle because they prefer to stay at home watching tv or playing games instead
of doing some exercise
. Companies could offer courses to raise awareness about how important is doing exercise
in our life
and how Replace the word
lives
prevent
Add the particle
to prevent
obesity
. Or have time to do activities and encourage workers to have healthier habits. Another good option is the
governments to implement machines in public spaces for Change preposition
for the
people
who cannot pay a
gym. Change preposition
for a
Finally
, schools could take some measures like offer
more activities in their schedule to students.
Wrong verb form
offering
To sum up
, there are some solutions to affront the
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apply
obesity
like healthy food or doing exercise
. I believe that it is extremely important that people
can be conscious about
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of
obesity
otherwise
it is a problem has become bigger in the future.Submitted by acostacamila255 on
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