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All over the world , societies are facing a growing problem with obesity. This problem affects both children and adults. What are the reasons for this rise in obesity? How could it be tackled?

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Nowadays,
obesity
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 has become a serious problem and more and more
people
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 have been affected by
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 and how it be solved.
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 with, a reason for
obesity
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 is fast-food consumption. These days are extremely common that
people
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 do not have much time to cook
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 because they are working a lot. Even,
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 parents give money to their children for school. So, it is easier they are buying fast food.
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, a solution for
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 is that
people
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 to reduce fast food consumption by doing healthy meals at home,
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 their own ingredients like vegetables and fruit.
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, companies and schools could offer healthy menus too without many calories.
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, another reason is
people
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 do not do enough
exercise
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. They have a sedentary lifestyle because they prefer to stay at home watching tv or playing games
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 of doing some
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. Companies could offer courses to raise awareness about how important is doing
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 in our
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 and how
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obesity
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. Or have time to do activities and encourage workers to have healthier habits. Another good option is
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 governments to implement machines in public spaces for
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 who cannot pay
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gym.
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, schools could take some measures like
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 more activities in their schedule to students.
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, there are some solutions to affront
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obesity
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 like healthy food or doing
exercise
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. I believe that it is extremely important that
people
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 can be conscious
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obesity
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otherwise
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 it is a problem has become bigger in the future.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obesity
  • Overweight
  • Epidemic
  • Sedentary
  • Processed food
  • Fast food
  • Nutritional education
  • Awareness
  • Stress
  • Emotional eating
  • Genetic factors
  • Access
  • Healthy food options
  • Marketing
  • Urbanization
  • Lifestyles
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