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Exercise 1 - Task One Pineapple exports The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.

Exercise 1 - Task One Pineapple exports The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.
The bar graph illustrates the pineapple
exports
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 in the world in 2009 and 2009 by the main three producing countries,
while
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 the pie chart has an analysis of the components of the
cost
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 of each pineapple in 2019.
Overall
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, the exportation doubled between 2009 and 2019, and
it is clear that
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 in 2019 the main
cost
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 is related to distribution and retail. Regarding the amount of
exports
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, the graphic shows that Country A has a
substantially
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 increase from 1 metric tonne in 2009 to more than 10 in 2019,
while
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for
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apply
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Country B dropped to almost a quarter of the
exports
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 in 2009 with less than 2 metric tonnes in 2019.
On the other hand
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, Country C
,
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 doubled their
exports
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 between 2009 and 2019 from around/approximately a quarter to a half metric tonne. As can be seen from the pie chart, in 2019 the main consumer
cost
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 was distribution and retail, with more than a third of the total expense, In second place was profit with 18%, followed by taxes which was 16%.
On the other hand
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, the producer
cost
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 is just 5%

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, cost with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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