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You and some friends ate a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter Give details of your visit to the restaurant Explain the reason for the celebration Say what was good about the food and the service

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Dear Sir or Madam My friends and I went to a
restaurant
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 to celebrate. We have not talked in a
while
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. We are all busy with our work. We went to a
restaurant
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 in our city. The name of
this
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restaurant
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 is "Muhtasham". The
restaurant
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 is modern and very beautiful. When we entered the
restaurant
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, we smelled flowers. The design of the
restaurant
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 is beautiful.
This
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holiday
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 comes once a year.
This
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holiday
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 is widely celebrated in Uzbekistan. The name of
this
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holiday
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 is March 8
women
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's and girls'
holiday
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. So we went to a
restaurant
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. On
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 day, all men give gifts to girls and
women
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. Men give flowers to their
women
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 on
this
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 day because
women
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 love flowers. When we entered the
restaurant
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, they greeted us with a nice attitude and quickly brought our order. We were happy about it. the food was very sweet and beautiful looking. The taste of food remained in my mouth. We liked it, we will visit
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restaurant
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 again. Many thanks to the
restaurant
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 manager and staff. Yours faithfully, Afruza
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Task Achievement
To improve your score in the task achievement criterion, ensure that your letter addresses all parts of the prompt more thoroughly. Mention specific details about the food and service that made your experience memorable. For example, you could describe a particular dish that stood out and mention how the staff contributed to the celebratory atmosphere of the occasion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Develop the logical structure of your letter by aligning your paragraphs more clearly with the different parts of the task. Start with an introduction that sets the scene of your visit, followed by a paragraph on the celebration reason, and then detail your experience with the food and service.
Coherence and Cohesion
Expand on the use of cohesive devices beyond basic connectors. Try incorporating varied transitional phrases to ensure smoother progression between ideas throughout your letter.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a more varied and complex range of sentence structures to enhance the readability and professionalism of your writing. Avoid overly simplistic sentences and aim for a mix of compound and complex sentences.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • outstanding
  • exquisite
  • impeccable
  • flawless
  • attentive
  • accommodating
  • courteous
  • prompt
  • delicious
  • mouthwatering
  • satisfying
  • memorable
  • thank
  • impressed
  • appreciate
  • grateful
  • recommend
  • celebration
  • occasional
  • special
  • occasion
  • stellar
  • exceptional
  • commend
  • commendable
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