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Do you think design of buildings have positive or negative impact. Which way it can effect on work and live?

EVERY BUILDING OR CONSTRUCTION HAS
THEIR
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 UNIQUE DESIGN. THE CONCEPT FOLLOWED BY THE BUILDER OR DEVELOPER MAY BE DIFFERENT FOR COMMERCIAL, RESIDENTIAL OR ANY OTHER PURPOSE-FIT BUILDING.
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 CERTAINLY CREATES
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 LONG-LASTING EFFECT ON THE PEOPLE WORKING OR RESIDING FOR SURE. THERE ARE INSTANCES WHERE SOME PLACES ARE TERMED AS VERY LUCKY FOR BUSINESS,
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 SHOPS WHICH MADE THE OWNERS MAKE THEIR FORTUNE OUT OF IT. ON THE FLIP
SIDE
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 SOME PLACES BROUGHT SO MUCH
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bad UNLUCK
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UNLUCK TO
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luck to
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 THE OWNERS
TO
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that TO
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RUIN THEIR
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LIFE TO
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lives to
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 THE CORE. IN MY OPINION, THE WAY ANY BUILDING OR CONSTRUCTION GETS BUILT, CREATES A POSITIVE OR NEGATIVE ENERGY VORTEX AROUND IT.
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 DEPENDS UPON VARIOUS FACTORS
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 WHAT TYPE OF LAND THE BUILDING IS STANDING ON, GEOGRAPHICAL LOCATION, AND PROXIMITY OF OTHER PLACES
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 PUBLIC TRANSPORT OR HOSPITALS OR A GRAVEYARD
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 AN EXAMPLE. THE SURROUNDING CREATES A FLOW OF EMOTIONS OR FEELINGS TO THE PREMISES IN A CONSTRUCTIVE OR DESTRUCTIVE WAY. IN INDIAN MYTHOLOGY, THERE ARE CERTAIN GUIDING PRINCIPLES LAID
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. THESE ARE CALLED VASTU-SHASHTRA OR THE "SCIENCE OF CONSTRUCTION". IT CONSISTS OF VARIOUS RULES AND DIRECTIONS OF HOW TO DECIDE THE PLACE, WHICH DIRECTION, HOW MANY FLOORS, SPACINGS, WHEN TO ENTER THE BUILDING AND LOTS MORE. THESE RULES ARE STILL FOLLOWED AFTER 4000 YEARS IN INDIA AND INDIANS STAYING ABROAD
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 ME. INDIANS GENERALLY NEVER KEEP THE ENTRANCE TO SOUTH AS IT BRINGS THE GOD OF DEATH "YAMA" IN THE PREMISES,
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 THE GUIDING RULE IS MAIN ENTRANCES TO BE KEPT AS "EAST-WEST",
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, THE VASTU-SHASTRA TELLS TO HAVE OPEN AIR AND OPEN LIGHT TO BE PRESENT IN HOME OR
WORKPLACEPLACE
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WORKPLACE
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CIRCUALTING
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CIRCULATING
 THE POSITIVE ENERGY. CHINESE CULTURE
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 FOLLOWS A SCIENCE NAMED "FENG-SHUI", WITH 100'S OF PRINCIPLES ON CREATING YOUR RESIDENCE, BUSINESS OR
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WORKPLACE
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 IT'S ALWAYS ADVISABLE TO HAVE A THOROUGH CHECK BEFORE PURCHASING A PROPERTY WITH THE OWNERS, AS IT MAY REVEAL THE BACKGROUND OF THE LAND, THE CONTRACTING COMPANY / PEOPLE OR ANYTHING SINISTER HAPPENING MIDST THE UPBRINGING OF THE SAID PREMISES. IN SUMMARY, THE PLACE OF WORK, BUSINESS OR STAY GETS INTEGRATED WITH YOU IN MANY NORMS AND IN MANY DIMENSIONS.
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HUMAN
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HUMAN,
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 WE GET TANGLED WITH
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 AN ENERGY VORTEX, WHICH BRINGS GROWTH OR
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 TIMES
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 TO WHAT WE DO OR TO OUR SOCIAL - PERSONAL LIFE. HISTORY HAS EXAMPLES RIGHT FROM KINGS AND KINGDOMS FOR CENTURIES ACROSS THE GLOBE.

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coherence
Be clear on the main idea at the start, and stay with it in each part.
coherence
Use one big idea per paragraph and give one short example.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words (and, but, also, then) to move from one idea to the next.
task response
Stay on topic: talk only about how design affects work and life.
task response
Give a clear example for each point, not long extra talk.
structure
Organize your essay as intro, body, and conclusion.
grammar
Fix grammar: use short, clear sentences.
content
The writer shows a clear view that design can affect work and life.
content
It mentions real ideas like Vastu and Feng Shui.
structure
There is a closing line that sums up the idea.
content
The text has many ideas and details.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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