In today's world, people are purchasing more than what they need. Is this a positive or a negative trend? Give your opinion with reasons and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays some
people
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try to live a minimalist lifestyle. In
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there are
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who spend
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on unnecessary
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,
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the fact that lack of management skills.
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has lots of demerits than merits. Because wasting
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badly affects the future. The first thing which happens if we buy unnecessary
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, the purse will be empty as soon as possible. In every moment
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our ,lives we need a master plan, even in
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shopping
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. There are a lot of
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that attract us to buy
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thing and buy that thing. If we go shopping without thinking about what we want, our minds cheat us.
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, once we faced, highly increasing prices of consumer goods,
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people
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came to the supermarkets and bought everything they need or not. But after a few months, prices decreased and those who stock lots of goods wasted their
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. To tackle
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problem I think following a list is a good solution.If we have a list of
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to buy,
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is really helpful to buy only necessary
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Secondly
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I think
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buy goods to show their status to
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. If it is not why do they waste their valuable
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on unnecessary
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They buy everything and fill up their stores and again they shop and again fill the stores. In
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can be a lot of wastage. There are the majority of
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suffering from poverty and they don't know how to complete their daily super.
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that, lot of orphanages and elderly homes asking for
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for supplying
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I believe
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must change their mindset and try to think about
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. If we start to think about
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hungry
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world becomes a more beautiful place than now.
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, I think
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trend is not a good development and it is time to stop wasting on unsuitable purchasing.
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