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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primaryschool rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is some controversy about whether a
child
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 learning a
second
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language
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 at a primary
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 is better or at a secondary
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 is better. The main advantage
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 studying another
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 at primary
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 is the access to get a better opportunity in career life and they can get to communicate well with
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random people all over the world.
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 there can be beneficial, there are some disadvantages like the difficulty how
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 the mother
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 properly and sometimes their brains which cannot access easily are not ready to learn a new thing. In my opinion, despite these downsides, children learning a
second
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language
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 at a primary
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 has advantages
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 more significant than at secondary
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. On the
downsides
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, learning a foreign
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 at primary
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 poses many challenges for a
child
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 some brains can accept two or three kinds of languages at the same time
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 that kind of situation really depends on
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 person. They need to force themselves to learn a new
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due to
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 under pressure
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 their parents causes forget how to speak
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language
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.
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, a
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 who attended an international
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 since he was young comes to communicate with other people, he prefers to choose to speak in
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 rather than his first
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. The reason why is he
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 not know much about how to choose
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in
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, nowadays, the world develops in civilization and so many other things. They can achieve
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better
opportunity
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opportunities
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 and
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quality
jobs
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 prospects if they know how to communicate with international organizations.
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,
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 is the most essential
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 for
communicate
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 with people all over the world more straightforwardly. Being able to speak
foreign
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language
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 will be so much better to get job opportunities when it comes to compared to another person who is not able to speak
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English
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, it does not matter as long as can speak
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 when they travel alone to foreign countries In conclusion, more and more parents
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 their
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to
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learn a
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language
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 at primary
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 is a clear indication that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Needless to say, there are some minor drawbacks to learning at a primary
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, but children who can speak another
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 fluently enjoy
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 life and can reap the benefits of learning
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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