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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#governments #money #railways #roads
There are differences of opinion on how to build transportation networks in each administration. Some experts believe that it is better to invest in
rail
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 transport system but
on the other
hand
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 some believe that road networks will be a better option. In my opinion, trains are
better
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a better
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 choice since they are more controllable and much safer than trucks and cars
in
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roads
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the roads
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.
However
, there are problems
such
 as lack of accessibility and high cost but I think they are solvable if we plan well. To defend the advantages of railways, we can mention two strong reasons.
First,
trains are more controllable than other vehicles. They don't lose their ways and their destination is predictable. You can plan in
optimum
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 way and control the traffic since all possibilities are under your control by handling train speed and access
path
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paths
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 on railways.
Second,
the probability of
accident
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 is extremely low. You limit the degree of freedom by rails
in addition
 to using
strong
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 brake system. So, you can keep your passengers and products safe and transport them quickly. You have everything you need for a good transportation system. From another perspective, there are two worries about rail routes.
Firstly
, we can mention their flexibility. They have some fixed roads and
as a result
, they can't have
a
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good flexibility in unpredictable
situation
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situations
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 for changing
path
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paths
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 or returning back to
origin
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their origin
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.
Secondly
, if we want to make it more reachable, it will be expensive compared to road construction. The financial expenses of building rails are 70% higher than asphalt. In
time
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the time
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 cost view, the manufacturing and installation of rails is
also
 more time-consuming. Investing in railways has some advantages and disadvantages. In my view,
this
 choice would be beneficial
according to
 the fact that it's greatly safe and quick and if we have to pay more money and spend more hours
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 that, we can compensate
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 over time through economic exploitation.
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  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
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