The diagram shows a process of making a storage area from a material called concrete canvas

The diagram shows a process of making a storage area from a material called concrete canvas
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The process diagram illustrates the steps involved in the construction of storage from a raw material called concrete canvas.
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, it is seen that eight steps are involved ranging from the production of bricks , transporting them, unboxing, laying, underground pumping of air, setting the concretes and storage is made. The process commences with producing of bricks which involved three stages from placement on a fibrous top surface to drying the concrete and
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layering it on a waterproof area.
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, the concrete canvas made are transported by trucks,
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they are unwrapped from their packages.
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, they are laid on the ground which is about 10 metres by pulling them with ropes from the truck and held with pegs.
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, the air was pumped from an air pumping machine towards the door to the underground surface on which the store will be built. The layer formed will be watered to allow it to form for a period of 20-24 hours. After setting, the storage area was made from concrete canvas.
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