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Today’s fresh food like vegetables or fruits travels thousands of miles from the rural areas or farms before it reaches customers in cities or urban areas. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative trend?

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It is said that nowadays
crops
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 like vegetables and fruits are
travelled
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 a long distance from countries to purchasers in towns or cities. The reason is that farmland requires enormous space. I think
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 is a negative trend because fresh food might lose its
quality
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 and affect the environment. The cause of a long distance
traveling
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 fresh food is that growing
crops
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 generally need a lot of space, so it makes sense that
farmers
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 need to grow their
crops
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 in the countryside because these places have much land with good
quality
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 soil, so
crops
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 can grow well and get effective results. I feel that it may affect the
quality
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 of
crops
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 if
farmers
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 have to spend too much time on transport.
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 is a natural of fresh vegetables or fruits since their
quality
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 can be good within a limited time.
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, strawberry is a sensitive fruit and requires much effort. If
farmers
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 were careless about
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 problem, it could destroy before arriving customers.
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, it can affect the environment along the way.
Farmers
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 might use cars or other means of transport, so the carbon released from those transports can lead to air pollution. It is not only bad for our breath but
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 pollutes the air. In conclusion, the reason for
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 trend is that most
crops
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 are grown in countries and should be
traveled
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 and sold in cities. I believe
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 is a negative development as that food might lose
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quality
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 and nutrients, and it can lead to air pollution.
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