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It is a natural process of animal species to become extinct (e.g. dinosaurs, dodos, etc.). There is no reason why people should stop this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is a controversial perspective heating up a debate over whether it is unnecessary for humans to combat the
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 of some peculiar species. From my perspective, I would not consider myself an advocate of
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 statement. Without a shadow of a doubt, wild animals are in dire need of being protected by people. It is obvious to note that there is an inseparable relationship between the human race and wildlife. If we do not take care of threatened breeds and push them closer to the brink of
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, they will soon bring a tremendous
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 influence on us. Pollinating insects like bumble bees can act as an eminent example. Those species play a significant role in the growth of crops and the deterioration of those can bring
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 the decline of cultivation productivity.
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 for humans to preserve endangered animals.
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 the imperativeness of saving wild animals is widely acknowledged, there are some circumstances where animal
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 happens
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 natural conditions which do not relate to people. The law of nature is complicated and connects all
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species together. If one breed cannot adapt to the change
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 environment, it soon experiences a progressive
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, dinosaurs thousands of years ago reduced their population sharply
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 climate abnormality and the rising of sea levels, which
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 led them to the brink of
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.
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, animal
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 is a part of a natural process. In conclusion,
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • species extinction
  • biodiversity
  • conservation
  • ecosystems
  • environmental ethics
  • habitat destruction
  • anthropogenic impact
  • ecological balance
  • natural selection
  • wildlife preservation
  • genetic diversity
  • endangered species
  • biological heritage
  • sustainable practices
  • Anthropocene
  • cascade effects
  • intrinsic value
  • habitat conservation
  • extinction crisis
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