Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?
In present life, plenty of
people
prefer to work
independently, than to work
for some organizations. This
essay will discuss why is this
happenig
and find some disadvantages of being self-employed.
First of all, I Correct your spelling
happening
ant
Correct your spelling
want
to
begin Add the comma(s)
,to
with
saying something about its reasons Change preposition
by
of
happening. Change preposition
for
People
are becoming more clever and smart in
Change preposition
at
this
time. Thus
, some individuals understand the pluses of being freelancer
. Add an article
a freelancer
People
may make an adapted plan on
themselves, Change preposition
for
make
rules as they want. Correct word choice
and make
As a result
, there will be no any
disputes about working rules. Correct quantifier usage
apply
For example
, some people
do not like when employers are manipulating on
them, and there can appear Change preposition
apply
a
unexpected debate. Change the article
an
Due to
this
reasons, the number of self-employed Correct determiner usage
these
persons
Replace the word
people
are
increasing steadily.
Change the verb form
is
Secondly
, this
approach has the disadvantages as well. The crowd sometimes go to complete it, but ignore
its drawbacks. Correct subject-verb agreement
ignores
Person's
discipline will deteriorate when no one is watching them. Correct article usage
A person's
Thus
, their work
will bring them less result
than they expected. Fix the agreement mistake
fewer results
For instance
, self-employed people
do their work
in
any time they wanted. They have no Change preposition
at
a
constant time to Correct article usage
apply
work
. In other
words
their day and their plans will fail. It is the most common Add a comma
,words
disadvantages
of being independently
To summarise, after analysing the situation, it is felt that it is okay that many Fix the agreement mistake
disadvantage
people
prefer to being
self-employed. It helps to develop the country. But they should consider any drawbacks of it. If Wrong verb form
be
people
will ignore this
factors, they could fail.Correct determiner usage
these
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