Many think that religion should be taught in schools while others think it should be avoided. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Some people assume that religion ought to be taught in schools

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the majority of people strongly believe it should be avoided. I personally vote for postponing the religion study for schoolers

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not being a mature and not interesting field for children. A large group of society firmly believe that schoolers are not mature to understand

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kind of article.

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, religious topics are extremely heavy for children to perceive.

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, Iranian students who have a high level of IQ are not able to understand the real meaning of being Muslim.

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, it is important to note that they are Muslim.

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to not understanding the topic, I do believe that religious articles are not interesting for students in

school

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, they do not show any tendency for learning it which makes the situation difficult for the teacher in the class.

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, all the teachers who teach

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subject in

school

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are suffering from resistance from students who do not like to learn it. some may claim that

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subject should to taught in

school

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due to

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the importance of it in their life and their behaviour in the future. To clarify, by teaching

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topic schoolers can learn how to behave with their friends and family.

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, they simply overlooked

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substance and they do not have enough reason to protect their idea. In conclusion, some think that religion ought to be taught in schools

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the majority of people and I strongly believe that it is not a good idea

due to

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not being mature in

school

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and not an interesting topic for them.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

273 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

religious education
multi-faith society
values and ethics
tolerance
diversity
religious freedom
secular education
curriculum
worldviews
interfaith dialogue
religious literacy
moral guidance
cultural understanding
critical thinking
respect
indoctrination
religious beliefs
secular state
religious extremism
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