There is a moral necessity today for the richer countries of the world to help the poorer countries develop in terms of feeding the population, education and health care. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, it is popular that many

people

claim that

countries

with

larger

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amount

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of money should maintain other

countries

that have some problems with

finance

, education and

heath

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aspect. I completely agree with

this

idea and I am going to give several reasons

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my point.

Firstly

, in my

view

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we are all

people

and we must help each other with

every thing

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that we have, despite our

nations

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means that even if you are English or American it does not matter because all of the humans are in the same situation,

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, we all can be in dangerous

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For instance

, if rich

countries

do not maintain poorer

nations

it can lead to earth pollution because of overpopulation or lack of materials for the same reason,

moreover

, if diseases will continue

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around the world it can result

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great sickness worldwide.

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, there are some

countries

that have a lot of money but they do not have a lot of

people

moreover

this

can be

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for large

countries

with enormous

population

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but

with

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dreadful

finance

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huge

countries

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their

people

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to maintain

with

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work that has demand for workers,

while

another country with great

finance

can help with

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support. In conclusion, my point of view is that I support

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that every country ought to help other

nations

with issues in life aspects

such

as ghastly

finance

, lack of food and problems with fine education.

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4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

251 words

5.50

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

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moral necessity
global solidarity
affluent
food security
global stability
poverty reduction
global health standards
economic instability
inequality
non-intrusive
sovereignty
autonomy
self-reliance
sustainable development
international cooperation
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There is a moral necessity today for the richer countries of the world to help the poorer countries develop in terms of feeding the population, education and health care. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Fully explain your ideas

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Some people say history is one the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

THE FOREST AND THE NEED TO PRESERVE IT. WHAT DO YOU THINK ABOUT THAT?

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?