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There is a moral necessity today for the richer countries of the world to help the poorer countries develop in terms of feeding the population, education and health care. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, it is popular that many
people
 claim that
countries
 with
larger
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amount
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 of money should maintain other
countries
 that have some problems with
finance
, education and
heath
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 aspect. I completely agree with
this
 idea and I am going to give several reasons
of
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 my point.
Firstly
, in my
view
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 we are all
people
 and we must help each other with
every thing
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 that we have, despite our
nations
.
This
 means that even if you are English or American it does not matter because all of the humans are in the same situation,
furthermore
, we all can be in dangerous
situation
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.
For instance
, if rich
countries
 do not maintain poorer
nations
 it can lead to earth pollution because of overpopulation or lack of materials for the same reason,
moreover
, if diseases will continue
spread
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 around the world it can result
to
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 great sickness worldwide.
Secondly
, there are some
countries
 that have a lot of money but they do not have a lot of
people
,
moreover
,
this
 can be
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 for large
countries
 with enormous
population
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 but
with
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dreadful
finance
.
For example
,
this
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 huge
countries
 can
sent
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 their
people
 that can work for other
nations
 to maintain
with
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work that has demand for workers,
while
 another country with great
finance
 can help with
money
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 support. In conclusion, my point of view is that I support
this
believe
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 that every country ought to help other
nations
 with issues in life aspects
such
 as ghastly
finance
, lack of food and problems with fine education.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • moral necessity
  • global solidarity
  • affluent
  • food security
  • global stability
  • poverty reduction
  • global health standards
  • economic instability
  • inequality
  • non-intrusive
  • sovereignty
  • autonomy
  • self-reliance
  • sustainable development
  • international cooperation
  • transparent
  • accountable
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