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Students should be allowed to choose academic courses or practical courses, e.g carpenters. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Well known by everybody that
life
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 expectancy in many countries is growing
nowerdays
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nowadays
. Let’s overview the advantages and disadvantages of
this
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 process in the
essey
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essay
. From one point of
view
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,view
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 long leaving is giving
losts
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lots
 of benefits not only for the country
its self
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itself
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 but for the individuals too.
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,
according to
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the
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British
scientists
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scientist's
scientists'
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 research elder generation is more experienced so they can share their
knollege
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knowledge
 with all others. They can help with
very
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a very
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 spread number of questions – starting from house construction and organization of working of factories and plants
ending
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 with how to manage
with
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apply
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babies. Speaking about the babes grand parents can
spent
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spend
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 time with their
grand children
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grandchildren
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 as
a
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babysitters
while
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 their parents are at work or go for a date.
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hand
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 there are some disadvantages of the growing
life
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 expectancy. The main here is that government has lack
of
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apply
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money to support old people. Based on the statistics there are
less
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fewer
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 and less amount of payments that are made for the
grown up
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grown-up
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 generation. And if children are not ready to support their parents or there are no children at all some of them are living in
a very bad
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very bad life conditions
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life
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 conditions when there is no
any
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apply
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money to buy even some bread. So, summarizing all said above long
living
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life
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 is not bad and in my
opinion
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 it should take place and
increasing
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increase
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 even more but
government
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the government
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 should be
prepaired
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prepared
 for
this
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 and to make good long
life
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 leaving for everybody. Here some new initiatives and programmes should be introduced to develop
good
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a good
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life
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living
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 environment with only positive influence.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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